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Vash the Stampede
Apr 23rd, 2004, 11:06 PM
I guess it's a prologue, lol. It's whatever you read on the back of a book, lol ...
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Frantically searching for my homework, I realized that I had left it on the bus.
"Mr. Williams!" shouted Mrs. Depardo, slapping a ruler on my desk, "I trust you finished last night's homework. Or was I correct in thinking that you would conjur up yet another excuse for not having it?"
"Well, unless you consider my dog eating it an excuse, then you were wrong ma'am," I replied.
"Felling like a wise-guy today aren't you? Well, I'll have the principla deal with you! March mister!", she said as she shoved me out the classroom door.
Walking down the hallway I noticed a figure sneaking into the janitor's closet. Creeping towards the door, trying not to make my wet shoes squeak on the floor, I saw yet another figure sneaking into my old 6th grade home room. I crept along the hallway even more and peered around the corner into the door.
Suddenly, I was jumped from behind. The lizard-like creature was trying to strangle me to the death. Two more came out of the room I was looking into. They both jumped on me and ...
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That's all ya get for free, lol. Naw, I'm just kidding. That's what the prologue or whatever is. I seem to have trouble with my POV. And my tenses. I don't think I have any spelling errors. I am more than sure that I messed up some on the speech structure. Oh well, lol. No one's perfect.

Well, what do ya'll think?

Sara
Apr 24th, 2004, 12:54 AM
Well..... It's interesting.... I like it.

Vash the Stampede
Apr 24th, 2004, 09:18 AM
W00T, lol. I got a reply. Yay! If only it was possible to indent .... maybe I'll use a line skip ...

Digispirit Virus
Apr 24th, 2004, 06:23 PM
i guess its ok...strange...but ok...

Amber
Apr 25th, 2004, 01:08 PM
oooooh..... liiiiizards... sry. too much sugar. its nice. ^_^ *nod nod nod nod nod*