Poetic Asskicking

[Alister]

Hai gaiz

Come show your poetic works. I know you guys are all writin' the poetry.

I'll start off with a lil' sum sum. Titled the Dolby 5.1

Life above me
Life below me.
Death.
EVERYWHERE

The mist
The headphones
I can't see
WEABOOOOOOOOOO

I see a train
It moves fast
Oh noez
AH!

Surrounding me is darkness
I feel from my hangnail
Theres a whiskey bottle
Shattered in the window

Surrounds.
The sounds
The headphones
The life.

So what do you guys think?

[dj_fender]

Dude.... Thats DEEP

I Call This One DTS Surround

Ya need a peice of tech, itll break ur neck,so freakin heavy, itl blow ur mind, when 6 channels, come alive, if the tv's big you got it made, if you got a small tv, time to complain, when you hear that gun, if you see da plane, dts surround...

[enolex]

heh, alister not bad, i'll look for one of my old poems, should be able to post it pretty soon

[Swift]

How Can You Regret What Never Happened?
by ME

A while ago, not too long since
I could've sworn i had it all
And i was shocked by her hints
That we never had anything at all

A sense of rejection and pain
Am i mistaking dreams for reality?
Or a brilliant way to avoiding blame?
I'm struck with a bolt of stupidity...

The bridge that once connected our hearts
From which we laid and looked at the stars
Eventually broke, and we fell so hard
(and with it a broken heart)
I later found it was broken from the start...

But still i know with a sense of security
Not boastful and struck with humility
That we happened and it was true
It happened and we were two
Two people connected and one
That in the end decided to run

But i find it to be a little fucked up
That even though the fault goes to your lies
Your fucked up game of surprise
That even now you continue to cower and hide
Behind your clever cover story that has already died
You're a liar that's been found for what you are
And still you carry your deception this far?
(i thought you'd learned)
(that lying leads to pain)
(hurting everyone around you)

But still i know with a sense of security
Not boastful and struck with humility
That we happened and it was true
It happened and we were two
Two people connected and one
That in the end decided to run

So i'm stuck questioning your truth
Your supposed regrets you took
("I'm sorry, i screwed up, i'm sorry")
But how can you regret something
If you keep claiming it was nothing?
I think you're ironic, and you're wry
And i'll always wonder why...
(why you fail to learn and improve)
notice that the deception you use
will only continue to fight and lose
everyone close to you

(clever deceptions and intricate lies)
(seem like such fun and games)

I think you're ironic, and you're wry
And i'll always wonder why...
(why you fail to learn and improve)
notice that the deception you use
will only continue to fight and lose
everyone close to you

(until you realize the hurt and pain)
(creeping like a hurricaine rain)
(on everyone you think you love)

And i find it to be a little fucked up
That even though the fault goes to your lies
Your fucked up game of surprise
That even now you continue to cower and hide
Behind your clever cover story that has already died
You're a liar that's been found for what you are
And still you carry your deception this far?
(i thought you'd learned)
(that lying leads to pain)
(hurting everyone around you)




i usually throw all my poetry away. this is one i kept.

[Alister]

I stopped reading at 'I find it to be a little fucked up'

That is all

[Alex]

YOU SAY BAD WORDS IN THA POETRY!

(I can read it in your eyes now.
I can see,
You're lost and you're confused,
Let the feelin' grow inside you,
We got no time to lose.)

Main chorus, splice it and put a dash of oregano

[Darksage]

I stopped reading at 'I find it to be a little fucked up'

That is all
That's nice..?

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It was good. It's not supposed to rhyme, or be "spiced up", poetryy is just supposed to come out of you, the first thoughts that you have. I liked it

[Alister]

That's nice..?

---
It was good. It's not supposed to rhyme, or be "spiced up", poetryy is just supposed to come out of you, the first thoughts that you have. I liked it
Depends, are we talking emo modern-age poetry, or GOOD poetry?

[Alex]

Depends, are we talking emo modern-age poetry, or GOOD poetry?

"GOOD" poetry doesn't always have to rhyme or flow.

[Alister]

"GOOD" poetry doesn't always have to rhyme or flow.
But I meant that in like y'know you see birds flocking. You do not say 'FUCK THE WORLD', you're just like 'dang those are some cool birds'.

[Alex]

But I meant that in like y'know you see birds flocking. You do not say 'FUCK THE WORLD', you're just like 'dang those are some cool birds'.


Ah, I see what you're gettin' at here. Don't be all teenage angst up in hur.

Plus, have a good reason to be pissed.

[Alister]

Ya I mean like say your moma beats you and your dog died and your fish is being eaten and you are being sent to boarding school and you have the avian flu in Iraq.

Alright I can dig you bein' a bit pissed off.

But like because your woman is all like 'lolnoob' don't be all agressing up in here.

[Alex]

Ya I mean like say your moma beats you and your dog died and your fish is being eaten and you are being sent to boarding school and you have the avian flu in Iraq.

Alright I can dig you bein' a bit pissed off.

But like because your woman is all like 'lolnoob' don't be all agressing up in here.


I hear ya boyyy.

[Darksage]

But I meant that in like y'know you see birds flocking. You do not say 'FUCK THE WORLD', you're just like 'dang those are some cool birds'.
It's his poem *shrugs*

[Renneme]

I write lyrics.

Can we sit in your window for a storm and watch the water fall outside,
Watch the rain cry from the sky, - and wipe tears from each other’s eyes?
And then I’ll whisper in your ear, “I wish this could last forever (Wish this could last forever, with our moods to match the weather)”
But we’re inches apart but miles away from something so good
I have my arms around you… but I can’t hold you anymore. Anymore…
What are we waiting for? (Waiting for)
We’re so perfectly different.
We’re bathing with these tears falling down – why, -
I bet I’ll outdrown you, sky. (x2)
Can I hold you in my arms, instead of watching you disappear into a night, mare that I keep rested in a box I never open.
“I still love you more than him (but I can’t keep on doing this)” Well I can’t keep on doing this
And I won’t keep forgiving you
Plus, this will be the ending soon.
What are we waiting for? (Waiting for)
We’re so perfectly different.
We’re bathing with these tears falling down – why, -
I bet I’ll outdrown you, sky. (x2)
And my tears will fall like roses, decorating your dress,
Sacrificing love for reputations looking best.
What are we waiting for? (Waiting for)
We’re so perfectly different.
We’re bathing with these tears falling down – why, -
I bet I’ll outdrown you, sky. (x2)

[Darksage]

Hey that's pretty good Ren ;)

[Renneme]

Thanks!