The Wolf

[Awesomo]

Hello folks, I decided to write a poem for no particular reason other than I felt like writing again. I enjoyed it, so here we go:

The Wolf
There once was a recruit in a once great force
He was a young man, a voice which was quite hoarse

Limited by the one who put him there
a cruel dictator we dubbed The Wolf

The recruit was sent to his native land
Sent by the Wolf, the lend a killing hand

To slaughter his family was his one order
To destroy all those across the border

If only he knew the day it happened
That the strangers whom he apprehended
Were the family, in which things left unsaid
Is now why they lie in each owns death bed

Word was spread that the recruit killed his kin
the string of his spirit, cut by a pin

Left was he, in dispair and quite distraught
Though after, he gave it never a thought

For this was when he learned why he was there
He knew now, what he was of rightful heir

He took his pledge, straight to the dictator
A chance for sure, for kis king's enamor

Brought unto the Wolf, his chance was dropped with a thud
For the recruit saw the truth, of his royal blood

Though the truth was there, the Wolf had no heart
He did not want his rule to break apart

The recruit was tired of all The Wolf's games
No justice to be found, through his royal claims

The recruit had no choice but to end all his fun
He took out the thing which hid his kin from the sun
And all was ended, with the bang of a gun.



So, do you like it?

[Darksage]

I think you tried too hard to make it rhyme and the story of it drifted, but it's pretty neat

Though the truth was there, the Wolf had no heart
He did not want his rule to break apart

^ best lines IMO

[Awesomo]

as I said, just a few minutes worth of thinking what rhymed with wolf, realizing nothing did, I just built a story off of, "what about a guy, who kills a dictator", then it developed into, "guy, drafted into an army, kills his family from dictator's orders, finds out, finds out he is the proper ruler, goes to the dictator who likes him a lot more (for killing his family with ease) than the others, and then kills the dictator when he rejects the recruit's truth" I tried to fit it in with rhyme as best as possible at midnight. Though the reason I did make it rhyme every line is that I don't like poems that don't rhyme, I think they are songs without the music and I hate songs that don't rhyme for some reason.

Anyways, thank you for your opinion.